FROM UNSUSTAINABLE TO SUSTAINABLE DEVELOPMENT

Remedial test correction

Commenting on a line graph

Stage 1: Introduction - Presenting the document /2
Rephrase references (type, title, author, source, publication date and place) : This line graph from a United Nations Development report published in 2016 shows the evolution of the HDI from 1990 to 2015 in the Democratic Republic of Congo (DRC),
Give context (scale of the document, type of country mentioned): so on a national scale in a developing country.
-Type of doc. /0.5 -References rephrased with proper verbs /0.5 -Context /1

Stage 2: Analysing the document /6

          Describing a line graph - What you see
   structured (≠ parts) and detailed description		         Interpreting a line graph - What you know
    add & structure the definition of key notions

2rst line: life expectancy
Life expectancy increases a lot /0.25
from about 0.35 in 1990 to 0.6 in 2015 /0.5

Very positive social aspects:
better health (more hospitals, doctors) /0.5
and better education (more schools, teachers) /0.5
=> better quality of life (= the well-being of a population) /0.5

2nd line: education
Education increases a lot /0.25
from about 0.26 in 1990 to nearly 0.57 in 2015 /0.5

3rd line: GNI per capita
The GNI per capita falls from nearly 0.4 in 1990 to 0.25 in 2000 /0.5. Then it stagnates but rises a little at approximately 0.3 in 2015 (less than in 1990) /0.5.

 But slightly negative economic aspect:
income, wealth decreased /0.5
=> low standard of living (= material comfort of a population) /0.5
=> 4th line: the HDI
The HDI falls a little from around 0.36 in 1990 to nearly 0.33 in 2000 & stabilizes /0.5. Then it rises a lot to 0.42 in 2015 (+ than in 1990) /0.5
 => A slightly higher HDI
= the Human Development Index /0.5
measures health (line 1), education (line 2) & income (line 3) /0.75
=> a little bit more sustainable /0.25
-Describing /3.5 -Interpreting /2.5 -Structure: +0.5

Stage 3: Concluding /2
Assess doc (reliable/biased justified): To conclude, this graph is reliable because we have its full references and it is unbiased as it is just figures without the opinion of the author.
Sum-up ideas (+ nuance/opening): To recap, this document shows that human development was very low in the DRC but it increased and became more sustainable, mainly thanks to social improvements.
Assess doc /1 (-Reliable /0.5 -Unbiased /0.5) + Sum-up ideas /1 (+ and - aspects)